Henrys return to diapers -- (Author) Fangs

[llsadmin]

############################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################
Author: Fangs
Timestamp: May 20, 2020 at 9:29 AM
Content: It was morning and Henry was sitting on the floor he was only 6 years old. Henry’s mother was quite concerned because recently he had became lazy about using the potty and had been wetting and messing himself. this has resulted in his amother being pretty annoyed especially that he started peeing himself in bed when he woke up in the mornings so his mother was at her wits end.

‘mommy look’ said Henry as he was a bit excited as a new toy he wanted was featured on an add and his mother came over ‘I want that toy, can I have it mommy please’ he said.

Henry’s mother smiled and she placed her hand on his head and she ruffled his hair and wondered if this is how he would stop wetting and messing himself if he had a new toy to get out of it.

‘ok sweetie but only if you stop peeing in your pants and pooping in your undies’ she said hoping it would work ‘ok mommy’ said Henry with a cheer.

Henry sat down playing with some toys and a good hour had passed and his mother was in the laundry doing a load of washing, the 6 year old realised he was needing to pee and he then got up but instead he relaxed as a wet patch spread across the front of his pants as he decided to pee himself again. Henry’s mother then came out and saw her son with wet pants.

‘why did I even try’ she said under her breath as she took Henry’s hand leading him to the bathroom and she removed his clothes and used a wash cloth to clean him up but then she walked off then from his room came ‘Henry come here please.

Henry walked out and he walked to his mother in his room and his mother then lifted him up off the floor and placed him on the bed, she pushed him back and took his ankles and then slid an open diaper under him and she then put his ankles down and pulled the front up between his legs then taped it up. Henry was shocked his mother had diapered him.

‘now you’ll be wearing diapers until you start asking to use the potty’ said Henry’s mother in a stern voice, she wondered if his wetting and messing was because he still used a pacifier during the day from time to time or that he has an OCD issue where he won’t except any drink unless it was in a baby bottle ‘b-but mommy I’m not a baby’ whined Henry.

Henry’s mother had nothing further to add, he was wetting and messing like a baby then she’d have him in diapers like one, this was also because the school was constantly sending him home after he’d wet himself every time he needed to potty and the day before where he messed himself in the middle of class. Henry’s mother smiled as she then started getting his uniform ready, he couldn’t belive it, he was going to school in a diaper.

‘ok lets get you ready’ said Henry’s mother as she then dressed him in his uniform, he looked down and the bulge was obvious in his butt area ‘I don’t wanna wear a diaper mommy’ said Henry.

Henry’s mother simpily took Henry’s pacifier and put it in his mouth and he blushed as it quieted him down. With Henry quiet his bag was packed with diapers put in it and then he was led out to the lounge room with a couple extra items packed he was led outside and they started their way to the school.

‘isn’t this a really good day?’ asked Henry’s mother and Henry blushed as he walked and the arrival at the school was pretty prompt ‘ok Henry I’m going’ said Henry’s mother.

Henry blushed as he entered the classroom and another boy ran in and he came up to Henry.

‘hi I’m Zach’ said the boy and Henry was a little surprised as this boy was in just a shirt and a diaper then asked ‘you wear diapers?’
‘uh-huh’
‘um I k-kinda…’ Henry froze.

The teacher came over and she smiled holding a pair of pants

(to be continued)

############################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################################
Author: Fangs
Timestamp: May 21, 2020 at 1:46 AM
Content:

PCBaby said:

I don't know how old you are or if english is your first language or not, but when writing a story for a forum or group you need to read it back and look for errors, bad sentence formation, grammar and punctuation, I'm not criticizing, just trying to make suggestion to improve the story.
As an example the sentence "The teacher came over and she smiled holding a pair of pants" cuold be written, "The teacher was smiing as she walked over holding a pair of pants".

Speech should be marked in "....." rather than in '.......'

Paragraphs should be more than one sentece long and include a theme so for instance - "
‘ok lets get you ready’ said Henry’s mother as she then dressed him in his uniform, he looked down and the bulge was obvious in his butt area ‘I don’t wanna wear a diaper mommy’ said Henry.

Henry’s mother simpily took Henry’s pacifier and put it in his mouth and he blushed as it quieted him down. With Henry quiet his bag was packed with diapers put in it and then he was led out to the lounge room with a couple extra items packed he was led outside and they started their way to the school.

‘isn’t this a really good day?’ asked Henry’s mother and Henry blushed as he walked and the arrival at the school was pretty prompt ‘ok Henry I’m going’ said Henry’s mother. could be made into a small paragraph as well as tidied up withsome punctuation, If you use word or office.org they have grammar checkers buils in and they will spot and suggest corrrections.

Keep writing you will get better with practice.

[End of quote]

i'm an Australian and a writer, the way I write is perfectly acceptable and even many books i've read some paragraphs are a simple sentince as you must start a new paragraph when a you have a character talk, so many paragraphs end up a single sentence, read a book some time from cover to cover. I post stories to entertain not to be criticized, I didn't ask for it so don't give it, if you can't say anything positive don't reply also I want to point out there's a grammer difference between writing styles. first person will use "...." because your directly quoting some one while 3rd person limited will use '....' because its a character speaking and not being quoted

ps. I totally like how you claim not to be criticizing then right away start criticizing

baby664 said:

@PCBaby ' ...' is acceptable/the norm for people from/learning english anywhere aside from the US

[End of quote]

i'm an Australian and yet he's being a hypocrite because he has spelling errors and his grammar isn't perfect either and doesn't know the difference in quotation and speech marks and how to use them in 1st person and 3rd person limited