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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 8, 2021 at 12:27 AM
Content: so this is my first story and i haven't found my way of writing so please let me know if i need to change anything
CAST
lilly(the diaper cat girl)
mom
dad
josh(boyfriend)
ms.clair(math teacher)
mr.cline(gym teacher)
ms.rose(principal)
sarah(best friend)
havent really thought of how to start off the story
so heres a choice for yall
1.has an accident at school
2. wets the bed at a sleapover at joshs house
3.does something and gets punished
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 8, 2021 at 1:39 AM
Content:
Fangs said:
you may want to give character ages for context before you even start a plot
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k thanks
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 8, 2021 at 5:43 PM
Content:
CHAPTER 1
"lilly get your but down here"lilly had gotten in trouble at school and ms.rose had called her parents and when she got home she went to her room and started to watch youtube when her mom called her down stairs. " Coming"she yelled back and she went downstairs.
when she got downstairs she saw she was in trouble and tried to fake not seeing her parents and went to the fridge but her dad grabbed her arm and brought her to the living room
lilly saw the paper on the coffee table and sat down on the couch and her mom said "the principal called us about you today and said you were being put in sac today for getting in fights and when she sent you to sac you messed your pants so not only did you get in a fight but you also purposely pooped your pants so she asked us if it was ok to send you to a special school with 2 classes and a principal names ms.rose and its a boarding school so you would live there and you dont need to pack anything because all you need will be given to you at your dorm"
"but mom what about here and why do i have to go to a boarding school when i havnt done anything wrong"lilly yelled
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hey guys so this is the first chapter let me know what yall think and should i add new characters
and this story is what i wish would happen to me when i was younger
and yes my real name is lilly
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 8, 2021 at 8:26 PM
Content: CHAPTER 2
at the school
lilly has just been dropped off at the school and the nurse walks up to her and asks"are you lilly" and lilly nodded not wanting to be there at all
in the nurses office
when the nurse and lilly get to the nurses office the nurse gives lilly a shot in the bladder and lilly yelps and says"what was that for?" and the nurse says "this is a diaper boarding school and all students are required to be in diapers and baby clothes and the shot is to make you dependant on the staff and to make you diaper dependant"
gym
later lilly is sent to the gym and sees a guy just exercising in the corner and lilly waddles to him and says "hi im lilly whats your name?"
and the guy just looks at her and says josh and then walks off
lunch
lilly gets in line not knowing the line is for staff and the principal comes and asks what is she doing in the line and lilly explains she is just trying to get lunch then ms rose
picks up lilly who is squirming wildly and sets her in a high chair and feeds her baby food and then burps lilly
in the dorm
sarah comes in with a staff member crying and lilly yells at her to shut up and then ms.rose comes in and gives lilly a bottle to make her sleep like a baby
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hi so this i just made up and im wondering if im doing good
and should i do something to make lilly scared
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 8, 2021 at 8:29 PM
Content:
kerry said:
I have a few thoughts, Lilly.
First of all, I'm always happy to see someone new contributing to the forum, so thanks! As to the story itself: well, it is clear you are new to the whole "writing stories" thing, so please allow me to give you a bit of advice on how to make your work stronger.
Let's begin with the basics: left justify your work. Center justification isn't even really appropriate for poetry, and in prose it just makes things feel weird at best and difficult to read at worst. Also, you need to follow rules of grammar: capitalize where required and use punctuation.
Finally, there is the plot. Your initial request for suggestions about where to take the story seems to indicate that you don't really have this thing planned out. This opening suggests that you should really spend more time on that. You dive into a plot complication before we have even met your characters, for one thing. Why should we care about them if we don't know them? Also, the complication itself is odd in multiple ways: not only is it strange for her to mess herself (out of anger? frustration?) but the fact that she was not even thinking about such a strange act while up in her room at the start seems bizarre (not to mention her claim of having done nothing wrong after such an event). I mean, how could it not be on her mind? And her mom's reaction is also bizarre: not only meekly going along with the school's odd (and in all honesty probably illegal) solution, but not indicating any surprise at all after hearing that her daughter messed herself at school?
This is what I mean when I say you need to take more time to plan. Figure out where the story must go and you'll know what details the readers need to understand about the characters and situation before you do something off the wall (which of course you will because, let's face it, this is a diaper fantasy story and almost all of them are fairly off the wall).
Good luck!
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its fiction so its not true and its really just the school giving a suggestion.
thank you for the tips its really appreciated
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 9, 2021 at 1:18 AM
Content: a quick pic i got off goggle of what lilly looks like
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 9, 2021 at 3:28 PM
Content: so should i just stop the story
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 9, 2021 at 3:29 PM
Content: the main character slowly gets to enjoy her diapers and being a baby
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 10, 2021 at 12:09 AM
Content: ill just stop the story then
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Author: kittygirl666
Timestamp: Feb 10, 2021 at 12:10 AM
Content: anyone can post how they think the story should go and ill read them later